This is the first diagram in the original notation. One move immediately seems off:

It seems that most of the errors in the follow-up notation are the result of this mistake, with the game recorder annotating their position relative to this move. All of the fixes that I have done involve shifting moves to the left, starting with this one.

 

This is getting pretty ridiculous. , , and don't make a lot of sense.

 

Again, several move look weird. Why doesn't white cut? Why ?

 

This is looking pretty reasonable, except for , which could just cut.

 

Most of these moves don't make a lot of sense. is ridiculous.

From here on out, most moves make more sense, as they are not in this area. You will still see some occasional strange exchanges, however, for example:

 

Fixed

 

A simple fix, moving over to a more normal position (mini chinese).

 

If we move , and all one to the left, so that it becomes a shoulder hit and follow-up sequence, the whole flow from to becomes natural.

 

Similarly, becomes natural, and it becomes obvious why didn't cut.

Moving one over to the left seems natural here, defending the cut while attacking white. and also make more sense now.

 

- already made sense, but now also makes sense

 

The combination of - as well as now make sense.