Extending From An Enclosure/ Discussion

isshoni I'm 13k, so my comments are a beginner's point of view....
Section What is the best direction to expand

It could be clearer that the point is to make box-shaped like territories, with a valid link (for example to Build box shaped territories) instead of the link to the non existent page box-shaped?.

About the second diagram: A jump from W2 would be more illustrative of the point of the section (which I understand is: choose the extension that enables you to make box shaped frameworks) So it could be a good idea to add the following diagram in between the two diagrams of this section:

[Diagram]

Box shaped versus flat spheres of influence



and a comment could be going along this line:

Black's framework/sphere of influence has a nice box shape. It is not flat at all but clearly bi-dimensionnal. Whereas White's position is more flat, more one-dimensionnal. It is less effective than Black's.
Therefore, B1 (a in the 2nd diagram of this page) is the correct extension from the enclosure; it is in the correction direction. We say that B1 (a) is in the primary direction of the enclosure.
W2 or (b), on the other hand, even though it's not a bad move, isn t in the correct direction: its follow ups are less promising than "a".

note: I don t know if 'primary direction' is a common english word in go, it s just that i ve read it in by Otake's Opening Theory made Easy.

This diagram could then be followed by your diagram with the W2 keima (to show a more Honte(?) move).

Section Extensions preventing extensions
The sentence "The choice for B1 instead of a has a more subtle reason." is a teaser to me: either a link should be provided to the curious reader, either, if the explanation in the link is well above the target reader's head, this subtetly shouldn t be mentionned at all, either, it should be mentionned in a note, not in the main text.



Diagram Ideal for both

At this stage, is the reader supposed to have understood the idea of the page?
If so, then the diagram could be presented as an 'direct application exercise': "Where would you play? a,b,c or d?" The commentaries you provided would then be given as a hint: "Among a,b,c and d, one play is good for both players, one play is good for Black and not so good for White, one play is good for White and not so good for Black, one play is not so good for both players The solution could be put in a note.

Remember, I'm weak, both at go and at using SL so please take my remarks lightly...
btw, I'm not even sure whether comments on a page being reedited should be on the Discussion page or not.


This is a copy of the living page "Extending From An Enclosure/ Discussion" at Sensei's Library.
(OC) 2007 the Authors, published under the OpenContent License V1.0.
[Welcome to Sensei's Library!]
StartingPoints
ReferenceSection
About