CapturingRaces1/Discussion

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SiouxDenim Did this book get copy-edited by a native English speaker? The [ext] Sample Material seems useful, but the language is rather awkward.

RobertJasiek: A native English speaker has not proofread the book. I considered a possible delay by 4 to 12 weeks for that too great. If you have suggestions for a second printing's language improvement, please send them to me by email. It is more interesting to discuss the book's go terms here or rather on a subpage of this page. What for example do you consider awkward?


RobertJasiek: SiouxDenim, please explain what about the language you consider "rather awkward"!

SiouxDenim: Robert, I don't want to go through all of your sample material criticising the English. You'd probably just ignore me if I did. Taking the first few lines in the sample text as examples:

The following kinds say how liberties are counted.
This doesn't make sense as written. I think you mean something like: The following text describes how to count the liberties for each type.

A string's physical liberty is an adjacent empty intersection.
Do you mean there to be only one physical liberty? The others types you list below allow multiple liberties.

''A group's number of approach liberties is the minimal number of the attacker's excess plays necessary for removal.''
Something like this is easier to read:
A group's number of approach liberties is the minimum number of unanswered moves an attacker must make to remove the group.
(maybe I haven't understand your use of excess in this case). Better still might be:
The number of approach liberties a group has is found by counting the number of unanswered moves an attacker must make to remove the group.


SiouxDenim As I said before, I don't doubt that your material is correct, but I find myself trying to understand your sentences; I'd rather be thinking about Capturing Races.


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